"Two more days Skylar, good luck and have fun!" repeated in my head over and over again. Thoughts kept running in and out of my mind, would I make new friends...get good grades? Going to a new different type of environment without knowing anyone to go through with, is not an ideal way of getting through your first day.
I was constantly given advice of what and what not to do the week right before school started. I felt overwhelmed with all the things I needed to know and needed to do. I was so used to seeing the same people everyday that I didn't think of what was coming my way, until it hit me. New faces, new classes, new campus was all a blur until the first day of school was getting closer and closer.
Waking up the morning where it was finally time to be in high school, my heart started to race and my level of nervousness increased. My parents tried to make me calm by telling me all the good things that could happen, but in the end that did not work. Arriving at school, I tried to stall my parents into forcing me to get out of the car by asking as many questions as I could, but coming to my senses I realized that I would never know if I didn't try.
Getting out of the car, I immediately tried to find people I knew so that I wouldn't be alone. Looking at all the other freshmen with their group of friends made me insecure that I didn't have a chance of finding new friends. I realized that I still had to follow a schedule that they have given to us the first day of school, I began to look around for my class asking for help from those who looked like they weren't new to the school. After all the school business that had to be taken care of, they sent us off to do the other things that we had to do on our own.
I thought to myself that if I did not try to be brave and step out of my comfort zone I would not get anywhere. So waiting in line to pay off school fees, I introduced myself to another person in line. I was scared at first, but when I gave it a try I felt as if it wasn't going to be that bad after all. I learned that if I didn't try new things and stopped being shy around others, I can do other things I've always wanted to do and achieve my goals. Even though I was scared, I have come to a conclusion that I can do new things and meet new people when I set aside the bad side of my personality and become a whole different person.
This essay nicely shows how you have progressed on the topic of the coming of age. It was a great way to show the progression in yourself and how you became a different person. Your sensory details are very descriptive and great. However, I do not find it to be unique Using words like "scared" may confine the personality since "scared" is such a common word. Other than that, I enjoyed your essay. Good Job Sky! :DD
ReplyDeleteGreat story and glad to hear how have you learned about yourself from the experience. One thing to remember is it is about coming of age so that means you have to remind the reader how you were before. We dont know if you were shy, outgoing, popular, a nerd or anything in middle school. This allows us to really see how you have changed through that experience. Good luck!
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